this story is about a man called Danny he gos on his bike and he got in a boat to the mountain
One day I was going for a ride on my bike. So I we through the cold freezing water in a big long boat. With my cool jumpey bike inside the boat. Then I got to the big scary mountain. So I went for a bike around the mountain. It was fun so I kept biking around there. There was pretty green grass, nice cold blue water, big brown seals and big bumpy rocks all around me. The clouds were big and cool and white but I kept going and there was a really big rock. So I used my bike to jump across then I did a flip over a big dangerous fence. I saw a big beautiful beach. So I got off my bike and I sat down on the sand I had a good adventure.
Hi Makenzie I like how you desribed all the stuff you did and when you desribed the beach. On the second line you can change we to went and that would make more sence.
ReplyDeletethank you but i did no get what you are saying to me
DeleteHi Makenzie I like how you described all of your work. Next time you should make your title much smaller.
ReplyDeleteok thank you but i think that the title is fine
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